Great job Ami! I especially like your introduction. I think it's catchy, and the thesis is very clear. However, I think it would be better if you would make 3 body paragraphs because it would look better and I know you can do it!
Very well done Ami :) Your hook was very interesting and got me to read more. I mainly like the conclusion since it wraps up everything you argued about in one paragraph and it was very well detailed.
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Great job Ami! I especially like your introduction. I think it's catchy, and the thesis is very clear. However, I think it would be better if you would make 3 body paragraphs because it would look better and I know you can do it!
Very well done Ami :) Your hook was very interesting and got me to read more. I mainly like the conclusion since it wraps up everything you argued about in one paragraph and it was very well detailed.
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